Everyone fights with their siblings. At one point, siblings get annoyed by each other or they would disagree and argue, but we learn to let go and move on. My sister and I have don’t go through a week without having a small argument. These small arguments, we usually end up forgetting about in the next 24 hours. The big fights however, results in us not speaking to each other in about 2-3 days at the usual. We usually get over these once something funny happens and we both laugh about it.
There is one incident though that changed a lot between us. Our brother was on a trip at the Philippines, our mom was at church, and our dad was at work. It was me and her at home and we were hungry. We were already a bit annoyed at each other because she was nagging me about cooking rice and I didn’t want to listen to her. I finally went down to cook some rice and she made a couple of spam for us to eat.She had told me that she was really hungry and I said I wasn’t that hungry. There was one piece left and she told me not to grab it. I didn’t want it but since I was angry, I didn’t think. I grabbed it to make her angry. I went over to the sink and began to wash my dishes. She began to yell at me. I simply ignored it and kept doing what I was doing. I heard a slam and turned around to see her coming at me. Halfway through, she formed a fist and when she was right next to me, she punched me in the face. I defensively grabbed her arm and pushed her away. Thats when I began to feel where she hit me, my nose. I grabbed my nose and bent over, closing my eyes. My mind went blank, my nose was stinging, and my eyes closed shut. I reflexively tilted my head up, just in case it was bleeding. Too late, I opened my eyes to see drops of blood on the floor and my hands was wet with blood. I opened my mouth to breathe and tasted it.
I immediately grabbed a towel, wet it and ran upstairs. It was all in a blur. Next thing I know, I’m sitting on my bed, crying, and wishing for someone to come home and save me. My nose burned and stung, I could hardly breathe. My mom had come home and my sister explained to her what happened. My mom knocked on my door and talked to me. She told me my sister regretted what she did and I know I did too but that didn’t fix things. For the next 2-3 weeks, we didn’t talk. We shared the same bedroom but no words were exchanged except for the usual “go eat” or “moms calling you” I forgave her for what happened and I slowly began to move on from it. Then one day she said to me that she wanted Jamba Juice and asked if I had wanted some. I said yes and on the way there, we talked in the car and everything was ok again.
Although that incident hurt me and still makes me sad to even think about it, it showed us that we both love each other no matter what. Even if we fight, we somehow always end up forgiving each other and still enjoy each other’s company. Sisters fight but we need each other. I could say the same about the rest of my family and even my friends. We fight but we get through it because we learn to let go and move on. Thats what unconditional love means. No matter what, we’ll love each other and forgive each other. This, I believe.
HEY BEKAHH! (:
ReplyDeleteOk, so i guess im just going to comment on your draft!Ahhh.. your essay reminds me so much of me and my sisters! ;P I really liked howyour essay flowed smoothly. The concept was fantastic and I think that you had a very satisfying conclusion. I agree that even though you argue with your family, even for the dumbest things, you'll end up forgiving them because thats what love is. Overall, it was a very heartwarming essay and I can completely relate to this story. It opened my eyes and made me realize how family is so important because they will always be the ones who love you the most (:
-Maddie Nguyen
HOLY TACOS. you're essay is 645 words. sorry for me being such the LOSER with the bad news :p (unless i'm mistaken...in that case, whoopies my bad)
ReplyDeleteso im suggesting you cut down on all the parts that are unessential to the story (ex. take out the first 2 sentences of the 2nd paragraph)
also, if you have time... i think youre intro could be stronger. it sounds really general, and you may need more of a 'grabber'. i guarantee it will make ur essay that much stronger :D
okay, last one (and a half): make the time frames exact (even if you don't know exactly). saying 2-3 weeks doesn't sound as *BOOM* as if you were to say '3 weeks filled with icy-cold silence' or something laddat. oh and also, read thru ur grammar a little just to check (such as 'My sister and I' instead of 'me and her'). oh and last, last thing: check the 1st sentence of the last paragraph...sounds small kine bumpy
good job, you're conclusion was a killer (in a good way). it wrapped up your essay & shows what your belief is(: good job!
-Korie